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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, some people believe that
students
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 should learn about
the
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science
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 which is involved in
food
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 and they should know the techniques that are used for preparing it. Meanwhile, others believe that the
students
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 should
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 their
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in
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learning crucial
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 during their
study
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time
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. In my opinion,
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 it is good to have knowledge about important
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,
students
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 should
also
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study
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 the
science
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 of
food
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 and the required preparation.
To begin
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why people think that it is necessary to
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food
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science
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 and the preparation involved in it.
Firstly
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, nowadays , people are becoming health-conscious and due to that fact, it is important to
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about
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the nutrients that are involved in
food
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.
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 ,
student
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the student
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 should know about the proportion of vitamins and minerals that are available in the
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 and about the fats and
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carbohydrates as it is very crucial for maintaining a balanced diet.
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,
students
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 must know how to prepare
a healthy
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healthy food
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food
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. To illustrate, they should know how to cook by keeping in mind that
food
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 should be healthy and they should know that if they eat a lot of junk
food
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 , it would be dangerous for their health.
On the other hand
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 , some of them believe that
instead
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 of studying
food
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science
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,
students
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 should
study
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 important
subjects
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 like mathematics, physics and there are many reasons behind that. One of the main reasons is that these
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 are very
time
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-consuming because many concepts are involved in them and
students
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 need to make their basics strong.
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,
students
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 will not get
time
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 for improving their basics when they will choose streams
such
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 as engineering and if they are weak in basics , they will not become successful in life. To conclude , I opine that it is good that
students
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 spend their
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in
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 important
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 but
however
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 , they should be aware
about
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 their health and
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, they should learn about the
science
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that is
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 involved in
food
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.
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