Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

There is an endless discussion in society about
integration
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the integration
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of
computers
into schools and classrooms. At the same time, the dependence of
students
on
computers
and
electronical
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electronic
devices may
threathen
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threaten
the educational system.
This
essay will discuss both opinions and give a personal statement. On the one hand,
computers
are the core component of
students
school life.
Moreover
, there are many evolutional programs that help
students
to learn some sophisticated topics and themes.
Furthermore
, it is more efficient for
student
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the student
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to pack one laptop than
enormous
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an enormous
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amount of books and textbooks as the computer will contain everything he needs in one folder.
For example
, teachers can use the
computers
to provide special or individual tasks, as well as, explain to every student the presentation if needed without delaying the progress of others.
On the other hand
, many programs on
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computers
are designed to entertain people.
This
may overtake
students
attention, which he is directing to the studies and lessons.
Consequently
,
this
will lead to
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lack of interest and decreasing
awareness
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the awareness
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of
pupils
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the pupils
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.
For instance
, an average student spends at least two or three hours on the phone or computer by checking emails and social media. So it is risky to allow teenagers
use
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computers
in the classrooms without
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strict supervision.
In addition
, the constant use of
computers
and laptops is harmful
for
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the spinal cord, necks and eyesight of young individuals. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, the introduction of
computers
to
education
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system and classrooms is a long-term process. It has both disadvantages and advantages. I suppose that some of the subjects should be combined with computer programs like chemistry or math.
However
, other more practical fields should be taught in
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style.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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