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People have different ways of escaping the stress and difficulties of modern life. Some read; some exercise; others work in their gardens. What do you think are the best ways of reducing stress? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

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People have different ways of escaping the
stress
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 and difficulties of modern life. Some read; some
exercise
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; others work in their gardens. What do you think are the best ways of reducing
stress
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? Use specific details and examples in your answer. In modern days, suffering from
stress
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 is inevitable for every
individuals
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. Being stressed for a long period of time may lead to a wide variety of health-related problem so they have to find out some effective solutions to alleviate the tension. Some people reduce strain by reading, while
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others do so by gardening. In my point of view, doing some
exercise
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 is the best
way
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 to mitigate
stress
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 because our mind feels refreshed after
exercise
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.
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, many studies have demonstrated that
practicing
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 sports is one of the most important activity to reduce
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level
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the level
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 of
stress
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.
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, our mind would be busy, concentrate
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 what we are doing. There are many
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exercise
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 that we can practice
decreasing
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stress
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, not only
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 in the
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,
also
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 running,
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 yoga, and riding
bicycle
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a bicycle
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.
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, I remember when I was studying dentistry
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 Rutgers School of Dental Medicine, I had
high
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a high
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level
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 of
stress
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 because I had to study hard to achieve my goals. During that time, I went to the doctor and he recommended
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exercise
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.
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, I improved my health and my mind started feeling more
relax
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. I could prove that
practicing
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practising
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exercise
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 is the best
way
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 to reduce
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stress
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.
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,
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 exercises is a good
way
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 to make new friends.
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, your circle of
friend
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a friend
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 become more varied. At the
gym
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, there are people from different countries and
also
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 cultures. In
this
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way
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 as your circle of friend increase your
level
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 of
stress
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 decrease because they keep
you
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focus
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 doing activities,
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 as hang out, and making competences at the
gym
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.
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, I remember when I started going to the
gym
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 for
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first
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 time, I was shy and I
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 myself because I did not know any person there. As soon I was able to make new friend my
level
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 of
stress
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 reduced. Since
then
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 I enjoy going to the
gym
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 to practice my routine. Even though
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work at the
gym
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 is hard I feel relax because my friends are hilarious and made
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me feel
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 distressed. In conclusion, we cannot allow
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stress
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be
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 part of our life or routine. We have to struggle against it. There are many ways to fight it, but for
me
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 the best is
practicing
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 exercises.
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