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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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For some
people
 accepting difficult situations,
such
 as disappointing jobs or a lack of money, is the best option, while others disagree and claim that trying hard to
change
 their circumstances is worth the efforts.
This
 essay will argue both points of view. On the one hand, some
people
 live in a situation that they do not like and are satisfied with having their necessities.
This
 attitude is understandable for
people
 who feel that they do not have the power to
change
. Studies have shown that
people
 who are not completely happy are often not motivated to make changes in their lives due to fear of the unknown. As a consequence, they simply accept their circumstances.
On the other hand
, some
people
 believe that unsatisfactory situations are the trampoline to better ones. These kinds of
people
 are more willing to make an effort and take calculated risks to improve their circumstances. They tend to be more ambitious and broad-minded. In general, they are more successful and probably more satisfied with their lifestyle. These
people
 believe that the possible positive outcomes of
change
 are worthwhile. In conclusion, settling for an unsatisfactory situation is not the best choice. There are so many possibilities in
this
 world that it does not make sense to accept the essentials. I believe that we should all try to attain our highest goals and not be afraid of
change
.
This
 requires some effort and sometimes risks, but the outcome is generally worth it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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