The costs of medical health care are increasing all the time. Governments are finding it difficult to balance the health care budget. Should citizens be totally responsible for their own health costs and take out private health insurance, or is it better to have a comprehensive health care system which provides free health services for all? Discuss.

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costs continue to rise, and governments are struggling to satisfy the needs of the public. The issue of private versus public
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systems is much discussed, and
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essay will consider both possibilities. On the one hand, in a private
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people
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can usually get a doctor’s exam and treatment more quickly and the treatment is often better.
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might seem to be a better
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, private
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systems depend on insurance or cash payments. Some
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can afford to pay for private
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while for others
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is impossible. As a consequence,
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kind of
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accentuates the differences between social classes.
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, a majority of deaths caused by the Covid pandemic in the USA have occurred among Afro-Americans due to underlying physical conditions and
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generally lower standards of living. The problem is not only limited to specific ethnic groups but applies to poor
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in general.
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a public
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people
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are treated more equally and not according to how much money they have. Response times may be longer due to the fact that everyone has access to the
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,
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, everyone is treated fairly.
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kind of
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helps to reduce
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differences. Most
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subsidized
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systems require that some
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work and pay for others who do not work.
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might seem like an inequality but in the long
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everyone receives proper
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, which is a basic human right. In conclusion, whereas private
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could seem more quick and convenient, a public
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system
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is the better option both to reduce the disparities between social classes and ensure
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for the entire society.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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