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Most people accept that we now live in a globalised world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. To what extent is globalisation a positive or negative development?

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It is no doubt that we are living in a globalised
world
. The thing is,
however
, is
globalisation
 a positive or negative development? There have been lots of debates on
this
 topic. In
this
 essay, I will compare both pros and cons of
globalisation
. Some
people
 say that
globalised
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world
 could be problematic especially to developing
countries
 rather than developed
countries
.
Firstly
, some minor languages are in danger because of
globalisation
. The number of
language
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languages
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 is decreasing so that language diversity
also
 being simplified.
Secondly
, developed
countries
 could dominate the global economy. It is impossible for developing
countries
 to compete with developed
countries
 in
globalised
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a globalised
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 market. Some
people
 say,
however
, there are much more pros than cons.
First
 of all,
globalised
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world
make
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people
 understand each other. We already have experienced how ignorance of others causes misunderstandings which leads to hatred and even leads to meaningless wars. That’s why
globalisation
 is the
first
 step of
world
 peace.
Moreover
,
globalisation
make
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people
 can solve global issues together.
For example
, there are plenty of problems in
current
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the current
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world
 like environmental and political issues. It is impossible to solve
these kind
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this kind
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 of problems in a country. To sum up, it seems positive aspects are way more than negative aspects. In my opinion, we should accept
globalised
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world
 because there are advantages rather than disadvantages. More or less,
however
, there should be global regulation or promises to protect the things and
people
 who are suffering from the globalised
world
.
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