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Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#group #students #classroom #home
There is no doubt that
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 the importance of studying in the classroom with other
students
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this
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students
 more
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, I agree with those who believes
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studying with
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others is more efficient. In terms of reason , the most significant reason
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students
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 a good chance to discuss some point that may not
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 well and
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 a chance
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 every
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 to participate
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 the discussion to explain some lectures they
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 understanding.
Besides
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disruption
 by phone and
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other
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 technology that make them less concentrated.
However
 , some people think there is a
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 in studying in a group of student
on
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 the classroom.
Firstly
 , the most substantial drawback is on the
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pandemic
 so learning online at the house is
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 to safe many lives.
Thus
 ,
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 of the
students
 who
suffering
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 from respiratory disease there is a high threaten on their lives and their family to be infected .
Secondly
, the
students
 become more
accessable
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accessible
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 the lectures every time they want . In
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addition
 to that , some of the family who not
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a
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funds enough to involve their children in the school. In conclusion , some of
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perfer
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prefer
 their children or even that adult to study in the classroom with other
students
.
Therefore
 , there
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some aspect
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situation
 that
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 mentioned . I believe that the prons
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 overcome the crons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Collaborative learning
  • Debate
  • Discipline
  • Engagement
  • Feedback loop
  • Peer support
  • Educational resources
  • Adaptive learning
  • Self-motivation
  • Independent study
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual classroom
  • Accessibility
  • E-learning
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