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Some people say now there is less communication between family members than in the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Humans are social creatures and effective communication help to build a healthy family and society.
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dialogs
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 between the parents and kids are getting weaker compared to the previous years. Everyone from the family should take initiative to increase the interaction and bring positive energy to the family. Comparing to the past decade world is running too swift and
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 have less
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 to spend in the house. Now a day’s individuals spend most of their
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 outside
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 for office work, business or few other engagements. Due to
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people
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 have less
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 to spend with family
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.
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, there is a high possibility,
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 working in various shift may not meet their spouse and children for numerous days in a month. Currently, professionals give the highest priority for career growth and to achieve
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 they are sending more
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 in their employment premises. Due to
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 sacrifice, they may be able to achieve better employment benefits,
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, they are losing the quality
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 they supposed to spend with their loving ones. Another factor affecting family bond is the newer friends circle created by each individual and they would like to spend more
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 with them rather than close relatives.
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 would like to spend more
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 with virtual friends from social media applications like Facebook, Instagram, etc. Recent researches show a major percentage of youngsters and adults spend many hours on the
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. In
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internet
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 was
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a luxury
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 and
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 try to avoid
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internet
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 during their leisure times. New technologies and mobile phones overcome all these imitations and today
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internet
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 changed from luxury to necessity. Now all the social media applications, instant messengers, games, etc. are available on
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mobile and
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 are spending valuable
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 on it. In additions to the above point’s other factors like stress, employment requirements, peoples demands,
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 gap between family
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, mistrust, etc.
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 playing a crucial role in narrowing the gap between family
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. Based on the factors furnished above I strongly believe
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 gap between the family
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 are increasing compared to the past decade and
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behavior
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 is not healthy at all. For a bright future
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 should take initiative to spend more
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 with family
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 and
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 employers and authorities enforce laws to reduce extra
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 spending on
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 and office.
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