In many countries paying for things using mobile phone app is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages than disadvantages?

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of the countries that bill
payment
is quite flexible through mobile phones.In my opinion, I think that the advantages of paying
money
through advanced technology are more compared to its disadvantages. On the one hand , there are many benefits to online
payment
.
Firstly
, it is not at all safe to keep
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amount of
money
as notes in hand due to the chance of theft and attack from others .
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,
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the phone

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app will be a great help for
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people to pay the bill instantly.
Secondly
, by the development of new technologies
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it aids to save the time and transaction will be done
with in
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a blink o eyes.
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, especially in big malls and
shops
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there is no need to count the
money
and purchase the things ,
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all will
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in a minute.
Thirdly
, technologies will ensure
the
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payment
accuracy by providing
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invoice ,
as a result
, in the future consumer could clam for any transaction error if it occurs
accidently
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.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages to online
payment
,
such
as it is
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easy for the hackers to enter
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the personal details of the buyer and withdraw the
money
.
Moreover
, if there is no proper networking it is not easy to do any
payment
through
mobile
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app,
hence
excellent internet is mandatory for the development to
being
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in action.
However
, these demerits are all preventable through conscious action by the purchaser. Everyone should safe
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their personal details prior to the
payment
, as well as make sure that there is good internet access
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the mobile phones. In conclusion, new
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shopping will ensure
the
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instant
payment
and it
also
enable
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the
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people to save
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time .
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aspect of mobile
payment
could be weighed less when
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to its positive aspects.
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