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For the past year, you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to discontinue your membership. Write a letter to the club secretary. In your letter ● state what type of membership you have and how you have paid for this ● give details of how you have benefited from the club ● explain why you want to leave

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter in regards to the discontinuation of my
membership
 at your
club
. I have enjoyed my leisure time in your
club
 and got privilege benefits as I have the Gold
membership
 with you. That type of
membership
 includes
the
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free yoga classes on
weekend
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 along with regular activities. I remembered that I have paid for
membership
 through my HSBC credit card and availed 15% discount on the price. I was new to
the
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Central London. My decision to join
you
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club
 was absolutely perfect. It was great to spend
a
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quality time and enjoy the activities, like
gym
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 and swimming pool. I got many new friends there. I never missed any yoga class, which is without any charges on
weekend
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. I lose my weight and my body is in shape now. Unfortunately, my work has decided to appoint me in Norway and I have to leave the country by end of
this
 month. Hereby, I request you to cancel my
membership
 and refund the remaining balance. In any case, I am back
to
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the
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London, would love to join your
club
 again. Yours sincerely,
Submitted by MK on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • polite greeting
  • membership cancellation
  • benefited
  • annual/monthly/family/individual membership
  • credit card/direct debit/cash payment
  • positive experiences
  • social interactions
  • fitness improvements
  • personal reasons
  • financial constraints
  • relocation
  • change in interests
  • gratitude
  • procedure
  • notice period
  • courteous explanation
  • future rejoining
  • sign-off
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