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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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While some scientists argue that foreign language should be introduced in the lower classes, others think that
languages
 other than mother tongue should be implemented only
at
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 middle classes. I believe that the advantages far outweigh the disadvantages because learning other
languages
 could help young individuals to receive and communicate ideas from other parts of the world.
To begin
 with, learning other dialects along with other speeches at young ages could help children to grasp it more quickly and easily because they have high absorption power compared to teenagers.
Secondly
,
this
 is a great advantage for young minds as well as for parents because parents could train primary school in whatever way they need to help them understand any language whereas when they become teenagers at secondary schools,
this
 becomes
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comparatively
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 and hard.
In addition
,
upbringing
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 of primary school individuals with new
languages
 could help them better understand, share and
adapt
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 new ideas in the future from different parts of the world which would break all the conventions methods practised till today.
For instance
,
as a result
 of the introduction of
French
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 in
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the kinder
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 garden in
United
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 States, helped a lot of people when they migrated to Canada and
moreover
, it assisted them to blend with the culture and tradition there.
However
, there are some demerits as well due to the tendency of young children getting attracted to the western culture because of the early introduction of foreign
languages
, which makes them forget about their traditions and cultures followed in their mother country.
Consequently
,
this
 would create a future generation who are unable to know what happened in their country fifty years ago. To conclude, in my opinion, advantages outweigh disadvantages as small individuals who could handle new accents and speeches would create a world with no language barriers.
Therefore
, foreign
languages
 could help young minds to a large extent at an early age.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Enhance
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Pronunciation
  • Mimic
  • Native-like accent
  • Cultural awareness
  • Sensitivity
  • Exposure
  • Resource allocation
  • Qualified
  • Effective instruction
  • Overwhelmed
  • Curriculum
  • Undermining
  • Mother tongue
  • Prioritizing
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