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. The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #children #parents #courses
It is believed that the growth of a child is based on the skills
aquired
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acquired
 by parents on parenting courses. I agree with
this
 opinion, mostly because a large
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percentage
 of newly parents complain because they are not sure what to do
obce
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once
 the baby is born and often they need help. I believe that a course can give you basic notions of how to establish a good education, what is
importnat
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important
 for a child during different stages of his life and how can you meet these
requirments
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requirements
. I would love to see courses
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 how to take care of a
new born
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, a baby and
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adolescents because needs change during the life of a boy or girl. Looking in perspective, most people need help
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 either relatives or friends. They ask for advice, they look for ideas of how to educate them and are
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constantly
 comparing their children with others. I
also
 believe that most of the parents will
firstly
 be very suspicious of
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 types of courses because there is a general
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 we have an instinct that
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 us, but surely most of us lack that instinct even though we don't
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.
Therefore
, I feel that a parenting course is an
usefull
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useful
 tool to try and raise your children by experts standards, ensuring an
armounious
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harmonious
 growth.
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