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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that social responsibility should be made mandatory in the high
school
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 curriculum, for instances, non-profit organisation, upgrade the neighbourhood or giving sports training to youngsters. I agree with
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 statement. In
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 essay I will elaborate about the community will teach
children
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 to be
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 person and more responsible citizen of their country.
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 with, In
school
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children
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 can be taught how to be a better person through
charity
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work
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. Lending help to strangers in undifficult circumstances. Performing
charity
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work
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,
children
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 can develop skills
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 as leadership, good communication, team-
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, management skills. These characteristics should be implemented in them at an early age and will be essential for them in the future.
School
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 can set up campaign or workshop to educate
children
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 about
charity
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work
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, in some schools in ,Russia there is compulsory
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work
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 where they have to visit rural areas and help needy ones.
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, teaching
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 responsible citizen of their country as they are the future, Improving the neighbourhood, planting more trees in the surrounding, painting the walls, collecting garbage in the area.
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, community service can instruct
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 to improve the world around them.
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, In ,India the prime minister Narendra Modi started an initiative campaign called Swatch Bharat cleaning local areas. In conclusion, there are many benefits
children
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 can learn from
charity
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 and
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 help to enhance the society. Unpaid community service should obligatory in every
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unpaid
  • compulsory
  • high school programmes
  • charity
  • improving the neighbourhood
  • teaching younger children
  • valuable learning experiences
  • communication
  • teamwork
  • problem-solving
  • compassion
  • empathy
  • connect
  • positive impact
  • mandatory
  • personal development
  • social development
  • interested
  • motivated
  • volunteer
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