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The average standard of people’s health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays many
people
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 preferred to
crime
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this
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 world.
People
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 are more addicted to
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 miscellaneous activities.
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 can be done in some circumstances or with an intention.In
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 I will look at both
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sides of the argument and give my opinion. It is generally believed that the culprit should be punished for each type of
crime
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. Some
people
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 prefer to harm others and they pretend to crimes
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 as murder,kidnap,robbery etc. For ,instance a criminal named jack killed a huge number of girls just to experience the thrill and pleasure while they scream during the murder.
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 felon is suffering from a mental disorder,he should be punished for his actions.
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, some
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 commit
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 because of their situation and apart from ,them some are forced to perpetrate
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, a survey conducted in India revealed that many young
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terrorist groups. While deciding the punishment it should be always taken into account that why the individual violates the atrocity.
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, some
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 commit
crime
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 because of their situation and apart from ,them some are forced to perpetrate
crime
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, a survey conducted in India revealed that many young
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terrorist groups. In conclusion,having manifested the aforementioned point of views and examples, It can be recapitulated that the
people
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 who committed
crime
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intentionally or by circumstances. They should be punished,
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, in my humble opinion in both cases, criminal should be punished and the motivation for committing a
crime
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 should be taken into account when deciding on the punishment by the government. Thu Aug 29 2019 Fully explain your ideas
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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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