It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought together.

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Families are not as close as they used to be. At least in countries from the western

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is a sad reality

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shared by all social classes, from E to A. The close unit that helped to shape our society through thousands of years is steadily

disapearing

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disappearing

, bringing together significant

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psychological

, educational and

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impacts. Why

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a trend is

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? There is not a single or a simple answers for that. In reality, there

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a multitude of drivers with different weights according to the social extract which by it was affected.

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we can pinpoint the industrial revolution as the common historical element and as the igniting force behind all of them. With the advent of the Industrial Revolution, strong economical forces were unleashed, creating social chaos, disintegration and progress.

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Human

beings were reduced to the role of instruments for profits. Men, women and children were not spared. Long and exhausting journeys replaced hours of family quality time together. Even those with more economic resources were

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affected. Money, leisure and hedonism had a tremendous moral impact. Selfishness and the

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aggressive

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for pleasure and adventure ruined many marriages. Not

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the

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of material resources

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created terrible feuds between relatives fighting for their share in the inheritance. The consequences of

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situation are clear. Depression, social instability and

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lack of

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collaboration

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the state of

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disintegration

is advanced, it is possible to recover part of the magic of living in families. Of

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families now should be seen in a

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different

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incorporating

the evolution of society

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inclusiveness

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could

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support

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endeavour by providing tools that make

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for people to keep connected despite

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distance. There is not a single solution. To reestablish the benefits of living in

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will demand a change in attitude, but the profits for both individual and societies are clear: the

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establishment

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of a state of belonging, sharing and

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collaboration

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values

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reward!

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

family interactions
technological advancements
virtual interactions
dual-income households
urbanization
migration
social structures
individualism
family cohesiveness
belonging
open communication
emotional support
shared activities
family dynamics
work-life balance
family traditions
regular gatherings
counseling
family therapy
prioritizing family time

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