In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your won opinion.

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According to the recently published data, many

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are working nowadays to earn extra

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to support their education

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or their own expenses. Some believe working is not essential at that stage in life as kids should just concentrate on education,

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others and I believe encouraging

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to start working early teaches them the value of

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I will discuss both views by using examples from, Oxford University 2020 study and the Daily Mail 2019 survey. On one hand, many parents believe it is best that

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should just focus on basic fundamentals of learning, as

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is going to be a vital component in their lives and should not get distracted by jobs, as they have a whole life to do so.

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, a study done in 2020 by Oxford University found that 76% of young people working part-time had 15. 5 % lower grades than

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who are not involved in any

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. Based on these results, it can be said that

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who are only fixated on studying tend to get higher marks

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to youngsters who have jobs. So if

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just focused on school-learning and not on paid-

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they will increase their grade percentile in school.

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, many believe if you give

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more responsibility

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as part-time job, they become independent early

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and learn to spend

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carefully. Many parents start

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learning technique early by paying kids for doing chores around the house.

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, a Daily Mail survey done in 2019, found that 89.8% of

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who tend to start working early spend less

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on unnecessary items compared to

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who do not start

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early. Based on these statistics, it can be said that

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learn to handle

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better if they start working at an early age.

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gives them an experience of what working life looks like. To conclude from the aforementioned arguments, it is a personal choice to

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or not during education,

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can

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and study well at the same time

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they have only to gain from

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experience.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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Topic Vocabulary:

Child labor
Exploitation
Minimum age
Work experience
Survival
Taking responsibility
Education
Poverty
Legal restrictions
Physical toll
Psychological impact
Cultural perceptions
International conventions
Economic impact
Work-study programs
Skilled labor
Unskilled labor
Developing economies
Moral implications
Professional development

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