The only way to solve the increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills. To what extent do you agree?
It is argued by some that better education at home by parents is the only way to fight the growing crime rate of juvenile offenders.
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essay completely disagrees with that statement. In my opinion, better education for mutual respect at schools
and limitation of the negative impact of social media are
far more important in order to solve the Change the verb form
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above mentioned
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schools
should invest much more on
teaching Change preposition
in
children
the importance of mutual respect and caring for your community, rather than just teaching math or biology. Young adults spend most of their time at school and therefore
it is vital that education programs will also
include aspects on
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For example
, schools
can have an
obligatory community service for every student once a week. Remove the article
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way young adults can obtain different perspectives on society and on the significance of helping others.
Secondly
, social media must take more responsibilty
and limit the amount of violence embedded in its content. Social platforms Correct your spelling
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such
as YouTube and Facbook
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Facebook
regulalry
display offending and violent videos that could inspire other young adults to act Correct your spelling
regularly
violentely
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violently
For instance
, a video of children
abusing and hurting a cat can spread quickly to a large number of viewers, some of them
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the
children
who might want to repeat the same horrific act themselves.
In conclusion, some may argue that parents are the only ones that are responsible for reducing the crime rate of young offenders, via better parenting skills. I believe that schools
and social media has
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influence on the behaviour of young Add an article
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children
and thus
should take responsibilty
as well in order to fight that serious subject.Correct your spelling
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