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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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years
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 more and more
students
 choose to
study
 abroad compare to the past.
This
 comes with some advantages,
such
 as learning a new
language
 or having more courses available.
However
, it
also
come
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 with some disadvantages like an increase in
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expences
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 and being far from your hometown. In
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analise
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 and cons. Nowadays, many
students
 decide to
study
 in foreign countries, which will allow them to speak a new
language
. In fact, living for 3 or more years in a new
country
 will
gives
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 them the opportunity to become bilingual, which is very important for many reasons.
First
 of
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 they will be more competitive when it comes to
find
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 a job. In many interviews
for
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 instance, the employers look at the number of
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the language
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 spoken by the candidate and
this
 will lead to a higher probability of being employed.
Additionally
, depending on where they live,
students
 will be able to find the most suitable course or master in a different
country
.
For example
, many
students
lives
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 in cities where they can not find what they want to
study
 and for
this
 reason they choose to change
city
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.
Therefore
, they will be more motivated as they can learn what they really want.
On the other hand
, moving
country
 is not always an easy choice as the University
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degrees
 are very expensive and you will
also
 need to rent a room or a flat for many years.
Thus
, many
families
 won't be able to pay
this
 amount of money for their children.
For example
, in the U.S.A most
of
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the
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Universities could cost as much as 50 thousands dollar per year
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wich
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 is more than the average salary earned by people in many developing countries. Another consequence of studying abroad is that
students
 will be far away from their
families
 and friends.
Additionally
, because of the high cost spent on tuitions and the rent, they won't be able to go back during the holidays.
Therefore
, they will easily feel powerless and lonely which can lead to depression and other mental illnesses. In conclusion, choose to
study
 in a
foreing
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foreign
country
 will surely give to the people the opportunity to learn a new
language
 but
also
 find the most
appropiate
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appropriate
 course, and because of
this
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 they will be more chance to find a job.
However
, because of the high cost needed
this
 will not be possible for everyone and it can
also
 cause mental problems to some of them as they will miss their
families
. In the future, we should be able to reduce the costs of universities and give more opportunity to
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families
 that can not afford it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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