International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local  inhabitants ant the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

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the
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globalization and liberalization, worldwide
tourism
surging day by day which
are
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very
benefit
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for the growth of
nation
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the nation
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. Due to global
tourism
people
can explore the whole world and rise the economy of that
nation
.
However
, every coin has two
side
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, if the exploring of
nation
inclining every year it
is
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also
effect on the
beauty
of that
country
.Some negative impact influences on the environment and local
things
which is not good. I will the merits outweigh the demerits points in the posterior paragraph. Admittedly, exploring
globe
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is the hobby of everyone life
people
want to spend their vacations and
memorabale
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memorable
time with their
love
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ones to go outside of their
country
. In
past
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few
year
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very few
things
of travelling but nowadays technology makes it easier for every
individuals
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individual
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. National
tourism
is very benefited for some
country
's because there
all economy
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depend on the visitors. Due to international visiting relationship get strong with
people
. Folklore
enhance
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their knowledge about
the
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new
things
.
For instance
, Singapore and Dubai are very famous for
tourism
that nations are very affordable for everyone.
This
the most beautiful
nation
and their Financial condition fully depend on the visitors.
However
, due to global
tourism
beauty
of the
country
falling down because the pollution rate and crime are increasing. Folklore lost
the
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the lack of the things
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things
lack of knowledge about that the
country
.
For example
, the
beauty
of
Tej
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Mahal is damage due to the pollution and crowd the actual floor of Taj Mahal is white but now
it's turns
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into off white. To
the
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conclude,
tourism
is not bad but some
things
which are done by individuals that are bad so
people
should maintain the
beauty
and follow all the rules of that
country
they can enjoy. International
tourism
is very
benefited
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.
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