In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay for their healthcare provision in the future. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the world many of the countries, the number of older
people
raised frequently which result
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more spending on
healthcare
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sector
.
However
, some
people
believes
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that
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young
people
pay some
amount
for their future healthcare maintenance. I agree with the statement because if
government
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just cannot spend
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amount
of
money
on
one
sector
so, each individual
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responsibility
responsibilty
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to pay some
amount
of
money
in the form of tax for
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good infrastructure of
health
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sector
.
First
of all, as we know that
healthcare
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sector
is
one
of
biggest
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issue of all the countries as it is very expensive so it would be difficult for the older
people
to pay
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te
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bills of
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a doctor
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, medicine and various test.
In addition
to
this
, if residents of the country help the government to pay
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small
amount
of
money
from their wages it will be
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support for the elder
people
. As well
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,
government
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will
also
manage the other sectors
such
as education and transportation.
In contrast
to that, it is not
possibile
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possible
for all the individuals to pay for future health infrastructure because they are working on
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amount
of wages
which
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can
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fulfil
their daily necessities. Due to that they cannot pay for social issues it may result
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extra
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burden on them and they feel depressed.
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in most of
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the countries
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countries
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only
one
member of the family earn
money
and rest of member depend on him.
For example
, in India due to huge population
oonly
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only
one
family member earn
money
to full the demands of their family if they pay some
amount
of
money
it can cause
deterimental
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detrimental
effects on their mind. In conclusion, it is important to look after elder
people
by giving them funds it should be based upon the earning of the family.
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