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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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Due to the rapidly growing
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world population and economies, human beings have created enormous damages to the environment. Throughout
this
 essay, I will discuss some of these damages created by people as well as how
government
 and citizen can ease the situation.
To begin
 with, many production factories and increasing use of motor vehicles are powered by the combustion of fossil fuels, which produced many harmful chemicals and pollutant gases during the burning process. The
government
 should monitor and implement certain regulation to address
this
 pollution problem.
For instance
, pollutant gas emissions from industries should be monitored closely and fine for exceeding the legal limit.
Moreover
,
citizens
 should be encouraged to use renewable power sources
such
 as solar power and
battery- powered
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 vehicles. Alternatively,
government
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 may improve the public transportation system and limiting the number of cars on the road by increasing the petrol tax. As an individual, it is very important for all of us to actively reduce the amount of energy used on a daily basis.
Secondly
, the growth of consumer spending
also
 rises the usage of
plastic
 package material, it is undeniable that the
plastic
 material will eventually turn into chemical harming the ecosystem. The local
government
 should ban the use of
plastic
 packing material
otherwise
 put on
a higher charges
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 for usage of it.
In addition
, more recycling facilities should be built nearby the residential building to encourage
citizens
 to reprocess. Meanwhile,
citizens
 should do recycling more as well as refrain from using
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 bag. Everyone should be responsible and stop buying any products which may harm the environment. In conclusion, both
government
 and
citizens
 should consider protecting the world the top priority and act immediately to ensure the safety and wellbeing of our planet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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