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Some people think that it is an individual responsibilty to take care of an environment but others think it is government's job to do so. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

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Some group of
people
 think that protecting
environment
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 is only
people
's response, while others argue that the
government
also
 has to take steps. In my own opinion, I believed that both
government
 and individuals must guard our
environment
. On the one hand, it is argued that per person must do some important things to keep the
environment
.
First
 and foremost, they must solve the
pollution
 issue. Because
pollution
 is extremely harmful
for
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to
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 the
environment
. Individuals must keep clean the area, where they are living. If everyone
keep
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keeps
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 clean at least their own territory,
pollution
 will
be
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be decreased
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decrease
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, which is beneficial for the
environment
.
Secondly
, everyone must plant at least one tree. Because trees have a vital part of life. They take the carbon gas to themselves, which is awful for
people
's lives, and give the oxygen to
environment
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.
On the other hand
, it seems to me that there are a lot of things that must be done by
government
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the government
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 to take care of
the
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nature
.
To begin
 with, to reduce
pollution
government
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 should decrease the number of factories and
also
 cars in the country. Because the gas that
come
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 from cars and factories damage
the
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nature
 every day and
this
 is
governmental
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a governmental
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 responsibility.
In addition
,
statement
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the statement
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 should invest the money to some groups that plant trees
every
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in every
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 territory of
county
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the county
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. Giving an example, in Azerbaijan
government
 invest
the
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money
on
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in
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 the group, which named IDEA, plant flowers, trees, clean
the
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most areas of
country
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the country
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.
Hence
, the air
get
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 fresher. If
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statement
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do
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does
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 not help
this
 group to guard the
environment
, they probably will not do a lot of things to protect
the
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nature
. To sum up, while some
people
 think that only citizens can keep the
environment
, I believe that
government
 has
necessary
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the necessary
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 responsibility
on
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for
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 protecting
the
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apply
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nature
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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