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Band 8 IELTS Essay Sample | News stories on TV and in newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. What is your opinion about this?

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Pictorial representation in a
story
 along with the text in newspapers or tv media is becoming increasingly common. The main reason behind
this
 is the
arguement
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argument
 that pictures are far more effective compared to words. I agree
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this
 argument and will demonstrate the reasons to support
this
. A picture speaks a thousand words, if we come across a picture in the newspaper it instantly grabs our attention and
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interest to read more about the
story
 develops. A graphic used in putting a
story
 across makes
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 particular read more gripping.
Moreover
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 pictures
helps
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 in depicting the
story
 much quickly and effectively as it helps in establishing a
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 with the article. If a
story
 is just
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 and has no pictures or visuals associated
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, it is more likely to be missed by the reader.
This
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of
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very important and useful pieces of news.
Although
text
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 in a news
story
 can give you the detail about the events yet the retention power is increased if a video or
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 image related to those events is shown. Even for
kids
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 the chances of remembering a topic can increase manyfold if taught or shown with the help of supporting graphics. As most
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teenagers
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the teenagers
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 these days are not interested in reading long texts or news articles, visual representation helps in increasing awareness about certain topics like politics, current affairs especially in
this
 age group which is very important. After listing out all the points,
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 strongly believe that images or graphics or any form of visual representation can be
extremenly
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extremely
 useful in putting the point across or helping the person understand and connect with a certain piece of information.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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