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With increasing populations and ever growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. what benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty ? how can this be solved?

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Nowadays, many nations are losing their natural
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 spots due to the rapidly growing
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populations and urbanization. Throughout
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 essay, I will discuss some positive effects
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 protecting
areas
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 of natural
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 and suggest some possible solutions.
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 with, natural
beauty
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spot
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 can definitely boost the nation's economy by attracting more tourist, within the nation and internationally. There are many travellers
enjoy
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 visiting and be close to the nature area so that they can get away from the
busting
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 urban city for relaxation.
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, more tourists lead to more national revenue.
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, protecting
areas
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 of natural
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 provides places for local to enjoy and destress, which will
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increasse
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increase
 the national's working force
productivty
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productivity
.
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 but not least, natural
areas
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 are often biodiverse, by
preseving
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preserving
 the animal habitat would
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promotes
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 healthy
ecosytem
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ecosystem
ecosystems
 and prevent
animal
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the animal
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 from extinction. In order to address the problem,
local
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the local
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 government should closely
monitors
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 and introduces law to protect the natural
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spot
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 from industrial pollution. Using
areas
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 nearby natural
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spot
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 for the development of industry should be prohibited.
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, the government should impose harsher fines and punishment for littering and damaging the natural
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 area as well as tightly controlling any illegal hunting activities. In conclusion, reserving
natural
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beauty
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spot
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 comes with many
benefitical
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beneficial
 impacts, both economic aspect and human wellbeing. Every
individuals
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individual
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 should be
responsbile
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responsible
 and take necessary actions to protect it.
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