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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions.

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These days the organizations are facing
lack
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 of interpersonal skills like cooperation among the resources. Which is a big impact on the productivity of the companies.
This
 essay will discuss
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the main
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 causes associated with
this
 epidemic and
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the proper
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 possible solutions to come out of it. The main cause of
non cooperative
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non-cooperative
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 skill is a
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competition
 between
employees
 due to higher expectations from the job. It is found that
team
 members hesitate to help each other due to survival in the job industry, they think, by sharing
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important information with other staff will reduce their corporate value. So they stop sharing required
porject
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project
 details, data and support. Recent research on
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organisation productivity shows that 55% of the projects are failed due to
non cooperation
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non-cooperation
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 of the
employees
. Another cause should be taken into consideration and
that is
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time
, which
employees
 face to complete the
work
. When
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unrealistic
work
 is expected from the resources, they will have limited
time
 to support or help their
collegues
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colleagues
. In my opinion, these causes and problems have
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a vital
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 impact on
organisation's
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an organisation's
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 productivity and the best solution to
this
 problem is spreading awareness and
importance
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the importance
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 of
team
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teamwork
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work
. Companies or
profit making
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profit-making
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 institutions have to
comeup
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come up
 with
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concrete
concreat
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a concreat
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 policy of
trainings
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training
pieces of training
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,
team
 building
programes
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programmes
programs
 and workshops on
benefits
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the benefits
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 of
team
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teamwork
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work
. The British outcome report has come with a result of implementing
team
 building
activites
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activities
 and it shows
treamendous
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tremendous
 outcome, 90%
projects
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of projects
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 are successfully delivered on
time
 with quality deliverables. In conclusion, The epidemic of interpersonal skills within the
employees
 are because of
compitition
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competition
 and limited
time
, which should be removed by imposing awareness of
team
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teamwork
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work
 within the
employees
. Organisations and
employees
has
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 to come together and build a healthy environment to enjoy the
work
.
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