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More and more people nowadays are buying fashionable clothes. Does it have a more negative or positive effects? Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your experience

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there is a significant increase in
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preferring
 brandy materials among
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 .while
this
 may have a negative impact there is
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such
 phenomena leaves
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 impression. in
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 I am going to highlight both advantages and disadvantages of
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 matter . many societies live for their status ,fashioned
cloths
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one
 of their
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priorities
properties
 . they consider it the most important part of their life when it comes to attending events
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because
 they believe in
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away
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 they get the
audiance
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audience
 attention which may lead to
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positive outcomes
such
 as more
intersts
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interests
 in investing in areas related to them and consquenecely growth of their
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fortune
.
furthermore
,
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comunity
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community
Comunity
 will
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recruit
 more tourists to its place where strangers will feel safe to visit them sensing that
such
 folks are upgraded and aware about outers so no fear to
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 visit . in terms of negative
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aspects
 of the stylish
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cotton
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 infiltration, traditions and culture will be the front line against it for
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 of reasons,
firstly
 once nation
promots
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promotes
 fashioned goods, it stumbles over the principle followed for a long time by ancestors which is according to them an
aggrassive
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aggressive
 behaviour toward the nation teachings and culture ,
in addition
 , the more using fashioned clothes the more the gap between poor and rich increases,
for example
 when student attend school the poor
one
 wearing simple traditional
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customer
 while the rich
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presented
 with
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 different style every other day which
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 the performance of the former
one
 badly . in conclusion, despite
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the
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positive
 impact of
followling
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following
 fashions there are
also
 many drawbacks for better nations
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there
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 be a balance while using stylish clothes by limiting it to
soical
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social
 and formal event and using it
interchangebly
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interchangeably
 with
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the traditional
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