In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.

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life span.

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persons and society at large. In

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and the probable solutions for the problem.

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of us would like to live longer and would love to spent time with their Kith and kin, but at the same time with age one can develop few health hazards. Few ailments are hereditary in nature like diabetes and few are contagious like tuberculosis etc. Both are disastrous for

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ageing body.

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one has to spend a lot of money on medication, which needs a healthy financial background.

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the burden of paying high bills.

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few diseases like strokes, Parkinson disease makes the patient unable to lead an active life.

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the sufferer a burden in the eyes of their family members a burden both

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the whole society is adversely affected and steps should be taken by the

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make proper health care

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and old age home for elderly giving financial and physical assistance it could help immensely.

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people to invest

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of their income. Another possibility to fight

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lifestyle. Without any qualms, it is seen that both individual and

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effort are necessary to cope up with the burning problems of ageing.

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average life expectancy
developed world
increase
individuals
society
personal goals
ambitions
quality of life
leisure
recreation
healthcare costs
challenges
healthcare system
ageing population
shortage
available workers
economy
retirement planning
healthy lifestyles
investing
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In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.

Fully explain your ideas

Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of the debate, and reach your own conclusion.

Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the reals need of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Some people suggest that there should be restrictions on a detailed description of crimes in the newspapers and on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Workers often retire at the age of 60 or 65. However, some people say that they should be allowed to continue working as long as they want. What is your opinion on this?