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Despite environmental concerns raised by scientist, people are not changing their life style. Why is this case? What could be done to encourage to save the environment?

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The
environment
 has become
the
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 hot topic of debate these days.
The scientist
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are
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 alarming
people
 regarding the degradation of
environment
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the environment
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 but, they are not taking
this
 issue seriously and does not bother about
this
.In
this
 essay, the reason behind
this
 mindset and what could be done to save the
environment
 will be discussed.
To begin
 with,individuals have become habituated
of
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to
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this
 modern lifestyle as they are comfortable in it.
For instance
,
air
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an air
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 conditioner,which is
the
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apply
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one of
the free radicals part
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 of daily routine.
Thus
, it is
difficult
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a difficult
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 task to leave it.
Moreover
,
individual
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an individual
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 thinks he is
one
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the one
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 who
do
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does
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 it and the single
usage
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user
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 does not harm the
environment
 and
this
 misinterpretation has misled the
people
as a result
,
environment
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the environment
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 will be harmed in long run.
However
, several steps could be taken to raise
the
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apply
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environmental awareness among
people
.
Such
 as, initiating
a
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environmental awareness
campaings
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campaigns
campaign
. In these
campaings
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campaigns
 making
people
 understand the importance of
freash
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fresh
 air and water.
Also
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,Also
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 they could be encouraged to use public transport and bicycle to move around in the city.
Furthermore
,volunteering service should be started in individuals workplace
such
 as cleaning their own area, cleaning the street,less usage of
plastic
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the plastic
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 bottle so that our mother nature will not be devastated. In conclusion,
people
 have become habituated
of
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this
mordern
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modern
 lifestyle and they can not leave it, so government should take some necessary steps to save the
environment
 and can create awareness among
individuls
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individuals
 importance of nature.
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