Some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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world of academic, there are
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uncountable theories and research have done, In order to develop
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believe that all information should be shared,
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some
data
is too valuable and not worth sharing without any conditions.
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discuss both side of notions, as well as my opinion, which will be outlined. The
first
and foremost reason that the whole
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should be freely accessed is that it helps reduce
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people have to spend
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the existing
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that, merging
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with ones they have
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able to gain knowledge but they can compare those sources. Not to mention that it really helps students who are
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of researching something but they have not enough money to invest to gain a better performance, like effective
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to facilitate them or some rare books. Like a flip of a cion,
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certain drawbacks. When it comes to business, some information is confidential and cannot be revealed in public due to a fact that it contains their secret techniques. Take cosmetic formula as an illustration, as it is
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to be the
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among all cosmetics and
skin care
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brands, sharing seems to be impossible.
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researchers
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devote themselves and pushing their most effort to obtain the
data
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aforementioned reasons, 100% open sources of
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far outweigh the drawbacks. It is inevitable that sharing us
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, but not in all cases.
Instead
, revealing it in just some parts sounds more
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and possible for people when it comes to publication sources oh knowledge.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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