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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Many
people
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 do not want to work in
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company
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a company
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 or organization as an employee.
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 is because many of them desire to
being
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self
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-employed.
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 situation stems from
people
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’s demands.
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, it cannot be denied that being
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self- employed
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self-employed
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 can be problematic and hard for some
people
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. The reasons why
people
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 choose
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self employment
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self-employment
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 is liberty.Many companies and organizations put some rules for their
workers
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 like
dress
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 code or time plans.
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, in these places ,
workers
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 are confronted by difficulties like dictating or manipulating by
boss
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the boss
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.
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,
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self employment
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self-employment
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 enables individuals to do what they want.
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, Bill gates who is the founder of Microsoft attach importance to
free
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the free
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dress
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 code.
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 is because he said that when he was a young worker , suits were compulsory for all employees.
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 situation affected his effectiveness because of
disturbance
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the disturbance
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 of
these dress
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this dress
these dresses
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.In
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 way, he said that
the
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apply
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one of the
reason
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reasons
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of
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for
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 establishing his
company
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 was to get rid of suits. On the one hand, many
workers
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 have an idol in business life
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Especially, Many management employees pursue the way of Steve Jobs who is the founder of Apple.After seeing the success of apple ,it is evident that many brands
about
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of
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 technological devices have emerged like Asus or
Lenova
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Lenovo
.
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, many
people
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 are predisposed to establishing their
company
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 for the sake of achievement.
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, the working method of
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self employment
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self-employment
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 cannot be achieved by all
people
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.
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 is because it triggers
the
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an
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 infinitive amount of
stress
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 , and
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 it can be
burden
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a burden
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 in terms of undertaking responsibilities.
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 , it is evident that many companies can not combat high taxes or the wages of
workers
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.
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 is because
,
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some entrepreneurs can not adjust all of
burdens
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the burdens
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 comprehensively to their
company
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.It is worthwhile to note that they need to know how to deal with
stress
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 because , without doubt,
stress
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 degrades the quality of effectiveness. To sum up ,
desire
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the desire
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 of being
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self employed
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self-employed
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 can arise from goals and the fond
of
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for
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 freedom.Despite these valid reasons, many of them are confronted by
stress
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 and the vast amount of responsibilities.
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 , they should know how to decrease these effect of disadvantages in their business life
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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