Teenagers in some nations work at jobs while they are still in school. Do you think it is a good idea for students to have jobs? Use specific examples and reasons to explain your answer.

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Nowadays,
students
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start
work
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along with their
studies
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. In some nations,
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a common trend that teenagers
work
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from their early age.
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it is beneficial for them to
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during their
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,
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there are some consequences of working with
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related to health. Let us discuss both merits and demerits in the following paragraphs.
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and
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foremost, working with
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is
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good use of free
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for
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.
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, it helps the
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to learn about their responsibility, punctuality,
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the value
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of the money and managing
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.
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to it,
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during study reduces the money related burden from their family. Apart from that, during
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the job
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,
students
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gain more knowledge and experience as they interact
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people at their workplace.
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, they feel independent and can plan their future
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. On the other side,
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with study has disadvantages too. The
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cannot have enough
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for their
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and sometimes the
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leave their study for earning more money in their early age which affects on their future.
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, the pressure of handling both
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and
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can lead
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to
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mental
as well as physical health
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related
problems during their early age.
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to it, Working
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have less
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to participate in extra-
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curriculum
curricular
and other activities
such
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as movies, parties with family and friends as these activities are
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an important
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part of their life. To Summarize, Working along with
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will be beneficial for teenagers in their future but at the same
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its
also
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important for them to enjoy with family their family and friends.
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