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Teenagers in some nations work at jobs while they are still in school. Do you think it is a good idea for students to have jobs? Use specific examples and reasons to explain your answer.

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Nowadays,
students
 start
work
 along with their
studies
. In some nations,
its
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 a common trend that teenagers
work
 from their early age.
Although
 it is beneficial for them to
work
 during their
studies
,
but
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there are some consequences of working with
studies
 related to health. Let us discuss both merits and demerits in the following paragraphs.
First
 and
the
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foremost, working with
studies
 is
the
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 good use of free
time
 for
students
.
Secondly
, it helps the
students
 to learn about their responsibility, punctuality,
value
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the value
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 of the money and managing
time
.
In addition
 to it,
work
 during study reduces the money related burden from their family. Apart from that, during
job
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the job
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,
students
 gain more knowledge and experience as they interact
new
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 people at their workplace.
Also
, they feel independent and can plan their future
accordingly
. On the other side,
work
 with study has disadvantages too. The
students
 cannot have enough
time
 for their
studies
 and sometimes the
students
 leave their study for earning more money in their early age which affects on their future.
Moreover
, the pressure of handling both
studies
 and
work
 can lead
students
 to
meantal
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mental
 as well as physical health
realted
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related
 problems during their early age.
In addition
 to it, Working
students
 have less
time
 to participate in extra-
curriculm
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curriculum
curricular
 and other activities
such
 as movies, parties with family and friends as these activities are
important
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 part of their life. To Summarize, Working along with
studies
 will be beneficial for teenagers in their future but at the same
time
 its
also
 important for them to enjoy with family their family and friends.
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