Governments should spend more money on education than on recreation and sport. Do you agree or disagree?

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expensis

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expenses

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sports

are very detrimental in the policy and motive of any Government .

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Pen is

mighter

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mightier

than the sword is the perfect and well known saying for the importance of an effective

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system.

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, at the same time

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and other

recretional

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recreational

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for the Holistic development of any Individual. With regards to emphasis on

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impact on any individual or a society as a whole.

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the gates of knowledge,

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has implications on day-

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of a Nation in terms of GDP.

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illiterate

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society without proper input from governing body

interfence

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any Government.

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Sports

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activities

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individual or society. Today ,

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sufferning

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from major lifestyle diseases like Diabetes,Depression,Asthma

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result

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of lathargyness that are spread due to non-physical

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continous

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reading and writing or learning.

Moreover

, due to lack of funds provided, there are a huge

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deficit

athelets

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athletes

that have potential, but without resources are useless to win any championship or trophy. In a Nutshell, A healthy body keeps a

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Healthy

mind. Both,

Education

and

Sports

or Reacretinal

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activities

are important for the holistic progress of any

natin

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nation

because without any financial input it will

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errodes

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erodes

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the country's pride and development.

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Governments should spend more money on education than on recreation and sport. Do you agree or disagree?

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Detailed descriptions of crimes on newspaper and TV can have bad consequences on society, so this kind of information should be restricted on media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such place?

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private transport is creating problems for people. What are these problems and how we can solve this?