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With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem?

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Because social
media
 sites
such
 as Facebook, Twitter and Instagram have become more and more common, an increasing number of young
people
 are using the internet without supervision to interact with friends both on and offline.
As a result
, many adolescents are at risk of crimes
such
 as cyberbullying and online theft. There are several solutions to
this
 problem, which I will suggest in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, One way to tackle
this
 issue is to incorporate online education into the school curriculum. The reason for
this
 is because what puts youngsters in danger is the lack of knowledge about how to
use
 the internet safely. A school is a great place to learn about online safety, as children can share information and discuss their opinions on ways to avoid dangerous situations. By making courses on online safety mandatory, they can gain skills to
use
 social
media
 safely. Another solution would be for families to set rules about the
use
 of communication apps. While there are certain things that everyone has to follow in terms of using social
media
,
people
 have different views on how much adults should control their children’s online activities.
Therefore
, I believe that it is a good idea for parents to talk with their children and set boundaries about their
use
 of social
media
.
For example
, some parents can allow their children to text only with
people
 they have met in person. In conclusion, we can mitigate the risks that come with online communication by online safety education in school and establishing family rules. I think it is crucial for adults to take responsibility to protect young
people
.
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