The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialize To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no doubt that technology has been helped to keep

ourselves

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connected independently

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part of the globe we live.

However

,

internet

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also

contributes to self-isolation and unsociable individuals. I totally agree with

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statement, and in

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essay, I will discuss both sides of

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argument.   In recent years,

one

of the most significant advents of cyberspace is the ability

of staying

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connected

one

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another. Most

people

nowadays can talk with friends and family despite

of

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their geographical distance.

For example

,

one

of my sisters lived abroad for more than a year, regardless

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distance we were able to keep

contact

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with her over Facebook time, Skype or WhatsApp.

On the other hand

, innovation in telecommunication has raised some drawbacks,

one

of them is the fact that some

people

might

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addicted to it, the consequences of

this

can be self-reclusion, isolation and ultimately, severe depression and anxiety. To illustrate

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scenario, it is not rare to see

people

having a meal while talking or exchanging text messages in front of a friend, who in turn is doing the same. Another example,

one

of my friends can’t sleep before tweaking her Instagram and

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her WhatsApp

first

thing in the morning,

therefore

, it has started to affect her personal and professional life. It is my understanding that

people

need to develop self-awareness, spend more time outside their homes, without been

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plugged

on

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their technological devices,

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they will suffer less from stress, depression, self-isolation and internet addiction. Conclusion In conclusion,

although

internet

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the internet

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can facilitate our communications and connection with each other despite

distance

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the distance

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, it can

also

cause harmful issues

such

as solitude, confinement and other major issues. In my opinion, the drawbacks outweigh the advantages.