The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world

The three pie charts depict the data about the three sectors of coffee around the globe. It is evident that Europe is a major nation that contributes to using coffee, South Africa
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higher through the delivery service.
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with consumption, Europe is a major with 41%, While America is on
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with nearly somewhat less than half. Japan comprises 12 per cent whereas ,in minor usage, rest of the world uses only 8 per cent. While considering manufacturing, South Africa is on top, making coffee in a proportion to 44.
On the other hand
, the other three countries are almost similar ratio: Indonesia (22%), Japan (18%) and Vietnam (16%). The
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pie chart of
profit
distribution indicates about different sectors of distribution in which, delivery service gain more than a half, retails slightly a quarter and Exporters to fifteen per cent.
Lastly
, with less
profit
, producers only have a tenth of
profit
.

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