The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world

The pie charts below show the coffee production, coffee consumption and the profit distribution around the world
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The three pie charts depict the data about the three sectors of coffee around the globe. It is evident that Europe is a major nation that contributes to using coffee, South Africa
in
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manufacturing it, and
profit
expenditure
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expenditures
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are higher through the delivery service.
To begin
with consumption, Europe is a major with 41%,
While
America is
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second
with nearly somewhat less than half. Japan comprises 12 per cent
whereas
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rest
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of the world uses only 8 per cent.
While
considering manufacturing, South Africa is on top, making coffee in a proportion to 44.
On the other hand
, the other three countries are almost similar
ratio
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ratios
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: Indonesia (22%), Japan (18%) and Vietnam (16%). The
last
pie chart of
profit
distribution indicates
about
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different sectors of distribution in which, delivery service gain more than a half, retails slightly a quarter and Exporters
to
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fifteen per cent.
Lastly
, with less
profit
, producers only have a tenth of
profit
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the profit
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.
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