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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

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It is true that advertising
its
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is
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 a way to communicate with
a
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apply
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specific
people
 it depends indeed on the
product
 or the
service
 for whom it is
adressed
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addressed
, but we have two different opinions : -
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 one hand some
people
 say that advertising encourages us to buy a
product
 or a
service
 that we really do not need, they explain that the advertising incites the desire of buying even we are not in need of
this
product
 or
service
,
for
example
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 they say that some biscuits and chocolates are unhealthy even though they are aware of that the advertisement of the
product
 incites the need of buying or eating
this
 kind of biscuit. -
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 the other hand, some
people
 say that advertisements inform us about the latest products and services, that may improve or help us in our lives,
for example
 when a society
create
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creates
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 a new phone with some
benificial
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beneficial
 application like counting the
heart beats
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heartbeats
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 when you are doing sport or an automatic call where you are in a critical situation just with one touch the emergency call is initiated. From my own
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perspective
prespective
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 I think that the advertisement
it
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is necessary for a society to sell her
product
 or
service
 and increase her turnover, the final choice is the customer who will make it, and some
people
 have to control and think twice before buying any
product
 to avoid
such
 inconvenience, and we
dont
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don't
 have to forget that there is
lot
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a lot
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 of work done behind an advertisement.
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