You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

It is true that advertising
its
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a way to communicate with
a
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apply

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specific
people
it depends indeed on the
product
or the
service
for whom it is
adressed
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, but we have two different opinions : -
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one hand some
people
say that advertising encourages us to buy a
product
or a
service
that we really do not need, they explain that the advertising incites the desire of buying even we are not in need of
this
product
or
service
,
for
example
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,example

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they say that some biscuits and chocolates are unhealthy even though they are aware of that the advertisement of the
product
incites the need of buying or eating
this
kind of biscuit. -
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the other hand, some
people
say that advertisements inform us about the latest products and services, that may improve or help us in our lives,
for example
when a society
create
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creates

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a new phone with some
benificial
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beneficial

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application like counting the
heart beats
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heartbeats

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when you are doing sport or an automatic call where you are in a critical situation just with one touch the emergency call is initiated. From my own
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perspective

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prespective
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I think that the advertisement
it
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apply

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is necessary for a society to sell her
product
or
service
and increase her turnover, the final choice is the customer who will make it, and some
people
have to control and think twice before buying any
product
to avoid
such
inconvenience, and we
dont
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don't

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have to forget that there is
lot
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a lot

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of work done behind an advertisement.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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