Over the last few decade the media has promoted the image of young thin women as being ideal. What problems has this caused? What solutions can you suggest to this issue?

It is inevitable that our appearance can be perceived as good or bad by people.In recent times,
women
who are not on the fat are often showcased as perfect.
This
essay will discuss the issues and how to tackle them. The possible major problem is the way plus
size
women
are being bullied.
Firstly
,fat
women
face numerous harassment from the young and the old.
For instance
, a big
size
lady in the
university
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of Ibadan in Nigeria was sexually harassed by her colleague after lectures on a weekday.
As a result
,she lost her self-confidence and withdrawal completely
out of
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the
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apply

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school.
Furthermore
,
lately
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there
have
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been an increased surge of
women
who have committed suicide.Because,most chubby
women
are not expressive,so they prefer not to speak up when faced with
such
situation
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.
In addition
,some plus
size
females have resulted to go for enhancement surgery and
this
has led to their death. Regarding the possible solution is probably a consultation with a mental health therapist. They would be free to talk about their challenges.
Also
having supportive and enlightened family and friends go a long way in aborting any suicidal thoughts.
For instance
,a friend of mine was advised by her friend to visit the therapist physician after having a session with her she felt much better about herself. In conclusion,
although
the major issues that arise from
women
being on the big
size
are reduced
self esteem
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and they
ending
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their life.
Therefore
,being with the right set of people that would inspire and encourage them would be of great benefit.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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