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The movement of people from the villages to the cities for work can cause serious problems in both places. What are the serious problems associated with this? what measures can be taken to solve this problem?

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Industrialisation
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The industrialisation
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 has led to an increase in the
number
 of persons migrating from rural to urban areas in search
for
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of
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 greener pastures.
This
 has led to serious problems
such
 as
over population
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overpopulation
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, but there are a
number
 of solutions available to tackle it.
This
 essay will discuss the causes of
rural urban
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rural-urban
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 migration and profer solutions to it. One major problem associated with rural exodus is
over population
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overpopulation
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 of the urban areas. As more people leave the villages to the cities,the
number
 of people in the city increases and
consequently
 population explosion occurs. Lagos
state
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for example
 has become the most populous state in Nigeria due to the high influx of people into the state,
this
 has led to several environmental problems
such
 as air, land and noise pollution from industrial and human activities,
thus
 affecting health negatively.
Furthermore
, there is an increase in
crime
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the crime
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 rate. As most urban dwellers are unemployed, a lot of them resort to illegal activities
such
 as stealing and cybercrime.
However
, there are ways of tackling
this
 issue.
Firstly
, the government can alleviate
this
 problem by making life better for those in the rural areas through
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the
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provision of basic amenities like hospitals, schools,
portable
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potable
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 water and electricity, and
also
 by making sure these are available for all, as it will help curtail the
number
 of persons trying to leave their present locations in search for a better one.
Secondly
, jobs should be created for all citizens, because, when everyone is engaged, it will drastically reduce
crime
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the crime
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 rate in the cities.
Similarly
, individuals can
also
 learn a skill for themselves, so they can earn a living without support from
government
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the government
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. In conclusion,
although
 problems of overpopulation and increase in crime rate are common in the city due to rural depopulation, the government can tackle these issues by creating a better environment for
her
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its
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 citizens to thrive.
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