Internet crime is increasing rapidly as more and more people are using the internet to make financial transactions. What can be done to tackle this problem

Nowadays, we can see the digital world has revolutionized

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society. Due to the rapid

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of people who made financial transactions via

internet

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the internet

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, the cybercrime is rising as well. In

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essay, I will explore the problem associated with

this

and suggest some possible solutions.

To begin

with, the increasing number of online transaction leads to more opportunistic crime

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hackers can easily gain unauthorized access to people’s computer system and obtain their financial and personal data for other dishonest and illegal activities.

For instance

, the hackers may use those personal data to make fraud transaction online as well as holding the victim’s information for ransom. Many victims will need to pay

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amount of money to the criminal for getting back the information been stolen. One solution to

this

could be everyone should purchase

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effective anti-virus software, using strong passwords for every website they are accessing.

Furthermore

,

internet

users should always stay alert and do not open any suspicious email and website.

As a result

, their personal data will be difficult to access by other parties without authorization.

In addition

, it is noticeable that many

children

have been targeting and being manipulated by criminal online, there were some

children

in the past being asked to expose their body online, cybercriminal

then

captured

this

and resell it illegally.

Moreover

, many

children

were harassed racially and sexually through accessing the

internet

. The local government should work with education institution to educate

children

on how to use the digital platform properly and its dangers. Meanwhile, parental guidance is

also

essential, parents need to play an active role and monitor their

children

’s online activities to prevent

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cybercrime. To conclude,

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cyberspace could have

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dangers, both the government and individuals should responsible and work together to avert any crime activities through

internet

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.