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Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your experience.

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Renewable
energy
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sources
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,
such
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 as solar or wind power, have become effective alternatives in recent years, so some
people
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 recommend replacing fossil
fuels
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 with them.
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 though, there still some who prefer to continue using fossil
fuels
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, as they are cheaper. Both of these notions are logical, but arguments exist. Many
people
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 support the idea of turning to renewable
energy
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sources
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 as soon as possible.
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 might be more understandable if we think about the causes that fossil
fuels
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 have to the environment. In order to mine coal or gas, a large piece of land is destroyed from deep holes digging.
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, solar panels and air generators’ placement is easier and more environmentally friendly. To illustrate
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, in northern Greece, many air generators have been placed in specific areas, where no nature has been damaged, that the cities are now powered by wind power only.
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, as the word renewable indicates, these
sources
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 are unlikely to end anytime soon. The sun and air are not limited, so the only thing that needs to be done is to use them wisely to our advantage.
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, it will be more effective if we start using these
sources
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 of
energy
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.
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, there are still some
people
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 who believe we should continue using fossil
fuels
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. The main reason for
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 the pricing. Fossil
fuels
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’ cost is significantly lower than that of renewable
energy
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sources
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. With
this
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 in mind, there are many houses that may afford
such
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 expenses, so they still prefer using conventional ways.
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, in poor villages, families would probably mind taking care of their members, by providing everything at a low cost and not spending a fortune on
energy
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sources
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.
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, there are several countries’ interests at stake that concerns fossil
fuels
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 mining. If we think about the power some countries have, we could immediately realize how difficult it would be to phase out fossil
fuels
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’ use. The wars that have been happening, for many years now, for
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 reason, are only the tip of the iceberg. To sum up, a change to renewable
energy
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sources
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 would be an environmentally friendly solution with great potential.
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, we cannot overlook the great expense of it and the fact that many
people
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 will not be able to afford it.
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