Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Facebook

, have been raising a lot of debates. Some might say that these sites have been proving their beneficial effect to an individual in term of providing a variety of tool for communication and connection.

On the contrary

, others insist the opinion that the risks of personal information leaking for social communities have been threatened by a hacker. Viewing from a general perspectively, I personally agree with the former opinion for the following reasons.

To begin

with, community from all over the world can communicate with each other by using social media.

Firstly

, most

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Facebook

to make friends so that we can have at least 5000 friends on our friend list which is so hard for one person to reach out to many friends in reality.

Moreover

, students abroad can use

Facebook

to keep in touch with their family.

Secondly

, by using

Facebook

public can update news and information anytime around the world. By

then

, we enable to join the studying group on

Facebook

to exchange a variety of studying method and knowledge.

Finally

, after a

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day, watching some movie or playing the game on

Facebook

helps us to release our pressure and stress.

On the other hand

, most

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people worried that the threat of being hacked their data. Hacker can use personal information for bad purposes when we post our picture or share our activities on

Facebook

.

However

, we can proactively manage to minimize

this

threat by not posting much personal on social networking sites. We can

also

take advantage of using

Facebook

to promote our business by selling product on it. In conclusion,

Facebook

and social media tools have a positive impact on mankind which have been by far outweighed the disadvantages.