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Establishing good relationships in the workplace is not important, as the primary goal of every person is to focus on work. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#relationships #workplace #person #focus #work
Nowadays, coworkers could have strong horizontal connections, but it
also
 might affect their productivity. In fact, if employees have something in common and side activities only solidify their
team
, it might benefit your company in certain ways, from my point of view.
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 exam) On the one hand, with your friends around it is difficult to concentrate on your job responsibilities, because of many small talks and offtopic conversation.
Therefore
, if close people are located at the office the whole day, they will not work hard enough and could even start to shirk
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their duties.
For example
, important tasks could never outweigh interesting discussion about recent events in the
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On the other hand
,
team
 spirit is cheap and
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, and at the same time a very powerful factor of productivity.
In other words
, If I weren’t planning to spend more money on
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 power of my
team
, I would organise
team
 building activities for them.
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, few paintball matches and small soccer championships each year
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 could lead to the least expensive income growth. In conclusion, I definitely disagree that establishing a healthy and close connection between people in your firm is not a smart idea.
Moreover
, it will not only help you to generate some extra income
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 but could save you some money, because you would have a chance not to increase wages in your company, knowing that
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 money there is something that your staff earn from their
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