The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagrams indicate the design and the location of an energy-producing
machine
using a wave.
Overall
, the first diagram represents a mechanism of
electricity
generation and the
second
about
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the position of
wave-machines
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wave machines
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and their installation costs. A wave-energy
machine
produces
electricity
. To describe the process, when a wave enters the
machine
and water levels
increases
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, which
push
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the air in the upward direction and the fan of the turbine move and
start
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rotating. Simultaneously, airflow inside from the top of the
machine
.
Consequently
, the turbine rotates and generates electromagnetic waves, which
further
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converted into
electricity
due to
electron flow inside the wire. The other figure gives information about the wave-energy
machine
location alternatives. The first option is to install the
machine
at the brink of the water source.
Although
it has less cost involved, it can get small waves and
thus
the output of the
electricity
will be less.
However
, the
second
option is to install the
machine
in deep water with
the
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high cost and high
electricity
production.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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