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when a country develops it technology,the traditonal skills and ways of life die out. it is pointless to try and keep them alive.

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Introduction
Technology
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 is crucially needed in our
life
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,yet some people think that it has negatively affected our ways of
life
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 and took us to lose our traditional skills. I agree with
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 opinion to some extent.
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Obviously, automation has changed our
life
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 dramatically,
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however
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 it has caused some ways in our activities to disappear,
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, many individuals
use
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 automatic cars nowadays without doing any exertion in driving.
also
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, many craftsmen,service sophisticated machines in their jobs, as carpenters did not
use
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 to cut wood manually,
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use
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 the cutter machines. another point is that most
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people around the globe utilize social media applications and websites like Facebook, Twitter, What's up and many other apps to contact each other
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 of having face-to-face conversations.
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 helps to increase the feeling of loneliness especially amongst youth,
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 it kills many old
life
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 events.but,
i
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 am utterly convinced that our losses may not be compared to our benefits.
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On the other hand
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, the technological revolution has enhanced our
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 quality ,
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, almost all corporations around the globe
use
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 computers and machines to lead productivity process and not
person
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 efforts.so now most factories and companies are in no need of many employees.
technology
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 has improved our ways of communication as well, we
use
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 the internet to keep in touch with others on a daily basis,
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consequently
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this
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 process saves time and effort, so I
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can totally
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say that we can't live without
technology
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 in our
life
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, like computers, mobile phones, and most importantly the internet service.
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 ,we see that
technology
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 is the main pillar for all of us especially in the 21st century,indeed
Conclusion
we have lost our old
life
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 good habits,but we still have some of it ,
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furthermore
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 with
technology
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 ,everything became easy and fast.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancement
  • Efficiency
  • Global connectivity
  • Cultural identity
  • Diversity
  • Innovation
  • Coexist
  • Sustainable
  • Eco-friendly
  • Energy-intensive
  • Practical skills
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Homogenize
  • Preservation
  • Global diversity
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