Despite a variety of sports facilities and gyms, people are less fit nowadays than ever before. What do you think are the main causes of this problem? What solutions can you suggest?

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lifestyle. It is not too late to find

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you some of my suggestions Poor eating habits

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more common in social media than

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in food products than physical exercise.

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, many individuals are still gaining weight and are prone to have

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increased cholesterol and fat levels in their bodily system. A solution I suggest that more sectors be involved in advertising

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provide support by searching for new ideas to make these

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society.

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of ways to implement healthy living through exercise and

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Despite a variety of sports facilities and gyms, people are less fit nowadays than ever before. What do you think are the main causes of this problem? What solutions can you suggest?

Fully explain your ideas

some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. others say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. discuss both views and give your opinion

Many young people move out of their homes to live alone or to live with their friends. Some people think this is a good idea. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

most employers do job interviews before offering a position to a person. do you think this is the best wsy to do it, or are there better alternatives? what is the best method of choosing employees in your opinion?