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It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is the best both for the individual and society Do you Agree or Disagree ?

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Some
people
 believe that the
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 age for
marriage
 is up to 30 because it has a positive impact on the person and
society
. I agree with the statement that early
marriage
 has more advantages than drawbacks, and some of them are a personal change and a power of motivation.  With regards to
individuals
, at young ages, their
habits
 are not yet formed rather than in the middle age as there is inexperience in relationships.
Also
,
people
 changing
habits
 demonstrate how couples fall in love with each other. Feeling a lack of experience in relationships, young couples are trying to adapt to each other and adjust to each other, and change their
habits
 to please the partner. In
such
 a way, they demonstrate their amorousness.
Thus
, the process of adaptation and grinding to each other will be easier than when it is scarred out between mature
people
. Yet another positive aspect of
marriage
 before 30 is that
individuals
 are building a career during that time, study at university or set up their own business. When
people
 have a sense of solidarity and love for a wife or a husband, they are able to overcome obstacles and reach the top in their careers.
Therefore
, early
marriage
 can contribute to the development of top specialists and highly- achieved
individuals
 in
society
.  In conclusion, my personal opinion coincides with the view that early
marriage
 has a positive effect not only on an individual but
also
 on
society
. At young ages
people
 are likely to change their
habits
, can easier adapt each other.
Moreover
, due to
marriage
, they may motivate each other to become highly-achieved
individuals
 in
society
.
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