People doing dangerous sporting activities like scuba-diving and bungee-jumping should be responsible for their own safety. Rescue workers should not risk their lives to save people doing those sports. Do you agree or disagree?

It is considered by some that
people
doing dangerous
sports
activities
such
as scuba -diving ought to
responsible
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be responsible
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for their own
safety
and
rescue
workers should not
risks
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risk
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their own life to save
others
. In my opinion,
rescue
workers have the obligation to save
people
's lives .
However
, those who are practising dangerous
sports
activities
need more education on how to protect themselves and be safer. On the one hand, it believes that
rescue
workers have made a vow and obligations from their line of training to protect
others
regardless of the level of risk involved.
In other words
, it believes that have adequate knowledge and training on how to
rescue
others
.
Thus
,
this
should be put into practice in saving
others
and theirs.
On the other hand
, it is considered that those who practice dangerous
sports
activities
such
as
bungee-jumping
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bungee jumping
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should
also
be responsible for their own
safety
.
Thus
,
this
can only be done if they have adequate information and knowledge
on
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the
safety
act.
Therefore
, rescuers can
also
help by informing them on how important
safety
equipment
are
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and how essential they use it .
As a result
,
this
would reduce or prevent them from
and
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any
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hazards that might occur doing
sports
activities
. In conclusion, rescuers have the obligation and they are
also
responsible for protecting and securing the lives of
people
around them but
also
those
people
practising dangerous
sports
activities
has
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have
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the right to prevent any
activities
that can put their lives at any form of risk.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intrinsic risks
  • rigorous training
  • ethical duty
  • thrill-seeking behaviors
  • high-risk activities
  • rescue operations
  • emotional toll
  • financial burden
  • safety standards
  • regulations
  • innovation
  • technology-enhanced safety
  • personal responsibility
  • adventure sports
  • extreme sports
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