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Some people think that current environmental issues are global problems and should, therefore, be dealt with by the government while others believe that these problems can only be tackled by individuals. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is often argued by some that the present environmental challenges are world problems and should,
thus
, be addressed by the
government
 while others opine that these concerns can be solved individually.
This
 essay is going to discuss both
view
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 and agrees that the
government
 is in a better position to tackle environmental issues. On one hand, climate change is so prominent and is everywhere so it needs
globle
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global
 intervention.
This
 means that the
government
 is in a better position to do so by coming together with other heads of states and find the most suitable way to stop climate change.
For example
, during the World Summit , different nations gave their plans on how they are going to tackle these challenges.
Therefore
 , since these problems affect the whole world there is
the
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 need for
the
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 global approach where leaders come up with the most possible solution ,like the decreasing of industrial emissions.
On the other hand
, some people believe that it is every
citizens
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 mandate to tackle problems of the environment.
In other words
, every person has a part to play so as to make sure our planet does not continue to suffer.
For instance
, making sure that litter is placed in the right place and
also
 avoiding cutting down
of
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trees ,unnecessarily. It is the responsibility of everyone to address these concerns.
However
,
indviduals
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individuals
 play a minor role since the issues are so rampant that they need the most suitable intervention. To conclude,
although
 people have a role to play in stopping issues of the earth, in my opinion ,I think the
government
 has the upper hand to eradicate them , because it has powers to minimize the causes of
gloal
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global
warming
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,
such
 as
,
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industrial gases.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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