Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore certain jobs which are not suitable for women What is you opinion?

People have different opinions about
gender
equality. Some insist that there are
men
centric jobs that are not for
women
.
Conversely
, there are people who
advocates
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for equality in
workforce
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. I will accord with the latter. In the upcoming
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I will put forth my views in detail.
To begin
with, physical strength is no longer relevant in the present job market. Traditionally
men
's strength is the driving force for some of the industries but with the advancements in
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technology
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there are tools that replaced
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muscle power.
For instance
, in the olden days, the construction industry mainly employed
men
, as they have to light heavy metals and mix the concrete but now tools like cranes & mixers
makes
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the job easy.
Therefore
women
can participate in any industry that they have
interest
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in without any constraints.
Additionally
,
now a days
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most of the jobs
requires
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skills that
requires
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technical prowess. Cognitive skills are
gender neutral
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and to excel in a profession, it needs interest and passion for the work.
Women
and
men
both possess
the
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problem solving
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skills and can finish the tasks.
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, almost 50% of the software employees in
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silicon valley are
women
, companies like google are encouraging more
women
to join their company. Thereby, in today's day and age discriminating a
gender
based on the work is illogical.
Hence
, to conclude, I would like to iterate my opinion that both
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sexes are equal and
women
should not be denied
opportunties
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opportunities
based on their
gender
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