Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past 30 years that may cities in the world are now "one big traffic jam" How true do you think this statement is? What measurement can government take to avoid this.

In
past
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the past
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three decades,
car
sell is increased significantly due to that most
cities
in the world are facing
traffic
jam
problems.In my
opinion
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this
statement is true as most of the families are having
car
these days and some of them are using multiple
cars
for daily commute.
Number
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The number
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of jobs are increased particularly in big
cities
and
people
owning more
cars
.These
cars
are used for daily commute to the workplace and ultimately causing a
traffic
jam
.Many families are having multiple working
memebers
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members
and all of them use individuals vehicles. As household is increased
people
are started preferring individual commute rather than public
transport
.To the addition of
this
number
of roads are same in most of the
cities
as compersion to
cars
hence
more
traffic
jam
situation.These days
car
is
also
a status symbol in some countries.
That is
also
resultting
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resulting
high rate of
car
selling.
For example
high
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a high
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number
of
car
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the car
a car
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are
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is
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noticed in new york as
comparision
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comparison
to three decades back.
On the other hand
,there are many measures government can take to reduce the
traffic
jam
in big
cities
. To ensure availability of public
transport
, if public
transport
is available easily
people
might use less
number
of
cars
.To directing companies to provide
transport
facility to their employee,
this
will reduce
traffic
on the road
sifnificantly
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significantly
significant
.By promoting
car pooling
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carpooling
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,multiple
people
can commute in one
car
and
this
can drastically reduce
car
ownership as individuals
dont
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don't
need their own
car
.Government can apply some taxes on
car
purchases like road tax,
polution
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pollution
tax,
that
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which
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might help to
reducing
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reduce
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car
ownership. To concludes, Increased
number
of
car
ownership causing
traffic
jam
in measure
cities
.Government
shold
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should
take measures like
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availability
avaibility
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the avaibility
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of public
transport
,educate
people
about
traffic
congession
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congestion
in
cities
and
polution
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pollution
population
. Impose taxes on
car
pursase
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purchase
.
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